User talk:Acostadc/sandbox

Hi Cheryl

Out of the potential topics you provided I think the first one would be the most suitable. The other two options are quite broad.

Peer Review
Hey, I found your topic to be very interesting and was looking into it myself initially also. I saw that you have some content at the bottom of your sandbox for what you want to add to your article. Here is my feedback for it, I like how it is very neutral but the flow of sentences and the sentence structure needs to be improved. The second sentence of the first paragraph feels like a run on sentence and is hard to understand because of this. I also recommend that when you are citing facts that you have a number of sources for the list of facts for the readers to know if these findings are one of one or if they have been replicated in other studies also. I see how you mention the implications on natives, you could touch on this by citing the current findings of what they are experiencing and the implications of what you stated on their well being. Other than this, you are on the right track, these small changes and additions will surely make your article more enjoyable. Cheers. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Lakhdeep97 (talk • contribs) 20:54, 23 March 2019 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the advice to improve my sandbox writing. I will make sure to incorporate and fix the sections you have pointed out. Acostadc (talk) 16:54, 25 March 2019 (UTC)

I like the information you've added to the sections of this article. The introduction sentence to the polar bear section was a good summation of the reasons this species is affected by climate change. I would consider looking at some sentence structure, but the tone is neutral and the information is all relevant. The freshwater ecosystem section is very informative and I think you chose a good scholarly source to back it up. Good job so far! Selaginellaa (talk) 01:32, 24 March 2019 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review, I'll take your considerations into account for further writing. Acostadc (talk) 16:54, 25 March 2019 (UTC)

Peer Review
Hi Acostadc,

Overall, I think you have some great points to add to your topic! My only concern is that your topic is very broad; this is something that I'm struggling with as well. I would recommend that you focus on a few specific "subtopics" instead of trying to cover the entirety of "Climate Change and Ecosystems". This is a difficult topic to keep a neutral tone for, but I think what you have added so far has done a good job in doing so.

Rachelzanini (talk) 21:53, 4 April 2019 (UTC)