User talk:Acrimin/Architecture of Limerick

Spelling/Grammar
Exceeds Expectations This is going to be based on your first two paragraphs of Thomond Bridge because I’m not sure exactly what is yours in the second half of the Baal Bridge paragraph. I think the spelling and grammar are excellent. I feel as if you don’t need “condensing them into one” offset by commas because of the word larger. Read it to yourself out loud and you may hear what I’m talking about. Comma placement, I know, is an exceedingly debated thing. Annoying, too, that there are no em dashes on this.

Language
Exceeds Expectations Diction is great, seems professional. I would add “as the story goes,” to the onset of the tale about the drunk and the bridge just so that no one (and people do this) mistakes it for an authentic claim so it is less about your ability than other people’s ability to understand things like kids and such.

Organization
Exceeds Expectations Organization is good. Headers stand out clearly. Information is central and paragraphs are not wandering.

Coding
Meets Expectations No discernible problems.

Validity
Exceeds Expectations Great story about the bridge. You picked an interesting one to feature in your contribution. Who doesn’t love a ghost tale, right? It’s not only entertaining, but sets a feel for the history and cultural importance of the bridge. This and the specs on the bridge feel confident to me. I trust the information.

Completion
Meets Expectations I think there is a lot of room for expansion here, but there are no discernible holes in the narrative you have presented that I can determine. I’m not confused or frustrated reading it. There seem no significant omissions.

Relevance
Meets Expectations There do not appear to be any places where the subject strays from what I expect to read after reading the headings of the article.

Spelling/Grammar
Exceeds Expectations The title says it all.

Language
Meets Expectations Good. I can't fault the first Thomond Bridge paragraph, but some housekeeping/nitpicking I can add in to the second: I would say "The bridge was featured in" (I think it sounds more standard and less likely to cause momentary confusion). Also, "A vengeful ghost, formerly the wife of the local Bishop, encounters" since the book title doesn't mention a ghost. You could also clarify the beginning of the next paragraph with, "In 1691, the bridge was the site of a failed defense of the city during the Siege of Limerick."

Organization
Exceeds Expectations Clear and thorough.

Coding
Exceeds Expectations

Validity
Exceeds Expectations Great!

Completion
Exceeds Expectations These are now solid informational paragraphs.

Relevance
Exceeds Expectations Yep,