User talk:AdaezeNoble313/Prostitution in Nigeria

Avani Singh's Peer Review
Hi! First off, I think that you have a solid start with a lot of information, so good job on that! That being said, I think that there could be more structure in how you break down the information. It is hard to follow direction when it just looks like a daunting large paragraph, so breaking it into more sections based on where the topic is going could be beneficial for the reader.

Also when talking about the beginnings of prostitution, expand more on what you are saying. For example, how did the demographic and commercial changes expand the commoditization of sex? Why was it that the cash economy made the prostitution business possible? The beginning and how/why it happened is an important thing to thoroughly explain in this article.

I also think that expanding on the public opinion and social norms at the time surrounding Prostitution would be interesting to incorporate, and how that impacted the Prostitution industry.

Overall great start, just try to focus more on the structural breakdown and elaborating on some of the concepts brought forth!

Avanisingh94 (talk) 00:06, 4 April 2022 (UTC)Avani Singh

Bailey's Peer Review
Hello!

This is a very interesting article, and I was hooked from the first few sentences. I think the information you add to the article is helpful to understand the full context. I would like to have seen more sources though, although the one you provide is good. With all of this information, you will probably want to produce 2-4 sources so you won't have to write so much to meet the sources count. While you were mostly neutral in tone, the line "Their presence was hardly invisible" does seem a little pointed and gives an understandably strong tone toward the British. It might be a good idea to revisit it.

I do agree with Avani though that there should be more structure. This is probably my biggest critique. I would create more subsections or change the section title to specifically talk about Pre-independence rather than history more broadly. This might make the information a little more digestible and help the reader determine the more specific chronology of the subject. Further, I would also add more about prostitution beyond Lagos and any early trafficking in the Nigerian interior at this time, if available. Another subject to consider for this area, and a potential way to ensure it is balanced, is movements in favor of sex work legalization, since you already talked about those against the practice. Outside of just this section, I've heard a lot about sex trafficking of Nigerians into Europe and how big of a problem it is in the 21st century. Adding more about modern sex trafficking would be both interesting and topical for the article.

Overall, I think this is going to be a great article. You have some great information established here, although it might need to be more organized and polished. With some additional research, I really think this will be an important article. Great job! I look forward to seeing the finished product. Bayjohenderson (talk) 00:45, 4 April 2022 (UTC)Bayjohenderson

April Ma, Peer Review
Additions to the article, such as the intent of women's advocacy in Nigeria and the concerns related to venereal disease, are valuable content and relevant to the article. The influence of British entrance to Nigeria and the introduction of the cash economy seems very important, but I think could be developed and made it's own section. I am not quite sure that "bringings" is correct diction, so it may be worth revising. I think that the changes to the draft including the influence of cash on prostitution are good, but can be compartmentalized for organization purposes; an example could be separating economic, legal, and social origins of prostitution in Nigeria (to distinguish the influences of the cash economy, prostitution laws, and social attitude toward sex and it commodification). I think the linkage between legal restrictions on prostitution to the rising stigma against VD and child prostitution is a great addition to the article that should be developed upon, and possibly in its own section because it can be considered a legal landmark/important turning point in the history of prostitution for Nigeria. I'm concerned about tone neutrality in the addition of the last paragraph ("Steeped in moralist sentiments"), which needs to have more robust sources and an explanation in order to stand as it, as well as the clarity of pronouns, and it may be worth reviewing what pronouns are referring to what. I also think the mention of the petition in the last paragraph would be strengthened if could be cited with the petition itself.

General improvements may include breaking up the article into sub-sections for organization, ease of reading, and narrative consistency (such as, making VD it's own sub-section). Additionally, new additions to the article could be strengthened with a wider array of sources. Overall, great start and potential for the article's reach! Aprilmayma (talk) 05:29, 4 April 2022 (UTC)

Natalie's Peer Review
There is a lot of great and thorough information in this article. However, the grammar and structure are a little all over the place. Creating headings and subheadings to distinguish between historical law and modern law, as well as the law in practice could be helpful for readers to digest the information. There are also a lot of references to various ethnic groups, neighborhoods, and provinces. To provide context for people unfamiliar with Nigeria, having links to their Wikipedia articles would be beneficial. I also did notice that the last paragraph seems to say some of the points made in the first paragraph almost word-for-word.

So far, the information seems to be detailing the history of sex work and the public's responses to it. Adding more structure and specifically-focused sections may make it easier to read. Since it is mentioned that the British colonial state's actions resulted in mass prostitution, it may be worth having a small section that explains the state of prostitution before colonialism, even if it did not exist.

Additionally, you need more sources, and I think extra voices would diversify the information and article. You may want to look for contemporary sources and/or prostitutes sharing their stories. Overall, you have a very good foundation!

GnatLec (talk) 05:55, 4 April 2022 (UTC)