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Arda Boga's Review on Democratic Confederalism
Hey Adam,

Here are some thoughts about your draft article on democratic confederalism:

1) I like the way you divide the article into relevant sections. I believe that you need a stronger intro, and that I like the current intro in the original article more. Adding more details in your intro could be a good solution.

2) In the history section, you state: "democratic confederalism is a blueprint to solving the Kurdish problem". Is this your own idea, or from a source? In either case, I can't see a cause-consequence relationship: why is this type of rule the best solution to the Kurdish problem? In what ways can it bring efficient outcomes?

3) While defining the term democratic confederalism, you explain well the "democracy" part (e.g.: it is more in the lines with direct democracy instead of representative democracy); however, I reckon that the same needs to be done for the confederalism part. Why do we even talk about a confederation in the very first place? What is the relationship between building a Kurdish state and appropriateness of a confederation for this state?

4) In the platform section, you clearly define the major principles of democratic confederalism. On the other hand, it sounds very monotonic (firstly, secondly, ... fifthly), and needs few more sentences for each point.

5) Once again in the platform section, I have a concern with the last statement. How can a "Kurdish" state claim to be non-nationalist? What is the key point that justifies the anti-national nature of the state? (maybe, talk more about the coexistence of Arabs, Christians, and Kurds in this state - but in the end of the day, it markets itself as a Kurdish state. To me, the statelessness argument is much more clear than the anti-national nature argument.)

6) It is a great idea to talk about the implementation of democratic confederalism in Rojava, as an original enrichment to the article. If I were you, I would try to connect the current situation in Rojava to each of the points mentioned in the platform section to see if it is actually a representative experiment of the democratic confederalism theory. Finally, although I understand that you feel the need to use "jineology", it seems rough and as a slight divergence from the topic: keep it, but try to incorporate it better.

Bonne chance!!!