User talk:Adam.PerrettGCSU/Evolution of nervous systems

peer reviewIsrael.tharpe (talk) 17:48, 17 March 2021 (UTC)
initially looking at the changes you made I like the way you made your additions directly into the article you selected. The first addition you made in the initial paragraph was great, i think it added relevent info on nervous system developement in a larger variety of organisms. However, you said that "data suggest" but didn't say what data, or from where, so it makes this claim seem less reliable. so probably explain what data or where or put a link to the data you're referring to so the reader can look at this data themselves. Good addiions all around in the neural precursor section, looks like much needed alterations were added for clarification and better the overall flow of the article. Awesome addition under sponges as well, no complaints there. I think your final addition to the article was the most important and necessary addition made. I think this addition adds more weight to this section discussing human evolution positively. and the content of this final addition looks spot on, well worded annd to the. point stating unbiased facts. no real changes need to be made here to me. but if i had to say anything maybe you could add a bit more here to this section or the neural precurso section since they seem to be of the most importance.

Dr. White's NEWest comments 7 APRIL
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Nice additions and links, Adam. Be sure to link your citations directly in the text. Maybe add an image or link to the section "Many primitive systems, like those found in complex protozoa, use non-electrical signaling for motility...". Whiteamphipod (talk) 13:12, 19 March 2021 (UTC)