User talk:Adam9390/Battle of Edgar's Lane

Feedback from Dr. Hyde
'''You’ve made a decent start here. What you have added is much better than what was up before. The two key issues are adding more citations in general, but also deciding how to provide the background about the Revolutionary War campaigns of 1778 for your readers.'''

1)    Lay out the structure of your article or the new chunks of an old article with an Introduction and titles for the parts you want to add or rewrite.

'''I’m not sure how much you will be able to add here – maybe focus on adding new sources and citations and choosing a few of your potential new sections to finish? Make sure you put in dates and links to other British and Patriot Leaders and battles. You could definitely write a conclusion that explains why the battle was important in the lead up to the Battle of Saratoga, a big turning point in the war.'''

2) Added new, high-quality sources (books, articles, authoritative websites)

THIS IS THE MOST IMPORTANT TASK LEFT:

3)Written 50-60% of what you hope to add

I can see where you plan to take this, but the key task is finding the details of the military situation in upstate New York in 1778 and adding sources.

'''Lender, Mark Edward. Fort Ticonderoga, the Last Campaigns : The War in the North, 1777-1783 Yardley, Pa.: Westholme, 2022. Web. ) OU has this online; Weddle, Kevin John. The Compleat Victory : Saratoga and the American Revolution 2021 (ALSO ONLINE AT OU) These books are specifically about those parts of the war. You should probably also look at the Wikipedia articles on the Battles of Saratoga and Fort Ticonderoga. . . also in 1778.'''

4) Thinking about linking as opposed to creating too much background

'''Here is where you might need to consider how much background people can get from other Wikipedia articles. I think you need more links to other battles, important leaders, battles that came before, etc.'''

5) Started to clean up a few paragraphs

You can decide whether you want to do this on the mainspace or in your sandbox, but the clean up and fixing spelling and writing errors takes a while.

GRADE FOR DRAFT (POINTS) : 68/80

Afh1858 (talk) 20:57, 10 November 2023 (UTC)