User talk:Addisonmmccormick/sandbox

Article Draft
Addison, Your draft is quite good and thorough. I like that you've inserted your citations in the proper places. Your sources seem good as well, but I would have liked to see some from the databases. There are a few passages where judgments are made and indicate bias, such as "predators are everywhere." Are they really? Be careful not to use non-factual information; also be sure to check for mechanical errors--small ones are hard to catch.JAirhart 19:48, 25 March 2018 (UTC)
 * Thank you, I will be sure to remove any opinion and revise my work to improve the quality. Addisonmmccormick (talk) 21:13, 6 April 2018 (UTC)

Peer Review on Article Draft
I like how long and well thought out your draft is. I would avoid using as many direct quotes as many of them seem to be opinions or unnecessary. This is very good otherwise though. SierraMichelle (talk) 13:53, 29 March 2018 (UTC)
 * Thank you, I will look at the quotes and edit accordingly. Addisonmmccormick (talk) 21:13, 6 April 2018 (UTC)