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McAlister is also the editor of Women’s Studies in Communication, which is an international academic journal that was founded by the Organization for Research on Women and Communication. Could delete filler words (also and which) to make more direct sentence. Abbi Duncan (talk) 16:26, 6 April 2017 (UTC)

Should birth place and colleges/universities attended all be under one section titled history and background?Abbi Duncan (talk) 16:28, 6 April 2017 (UTC) The "tourist gaze" is a way of viewing culture as a commodity and can shift tragic sites of trauma into a site that offers pleasure at the expense of others pain, often with a consumerism goal. "as a commodity and can shift".. can could be changed to that Abbi Duncan (talk) 16:34, 6 April 2017 (UTC)

It was not until after visiting with her advisor, who was a well established scholar, to discuss the dilemma of McAlister’s biological clock did she decide to have children. "who was a well established scholar" could be changed to just "a well establish scholar" to eliminate filler wordsAbbi Duncan (talk) 16:39, 6 April 2017 (UTC)

Make sure to include citations throughout your scholarly work sectionAbbi Duncan (talk) 16:39, 6 April 2017 (UTC)

Overall your article was great, the scholarly work section specifically included an abundance of insightful information in regards to your scholar's work. Other than a few minor fixes, this is a great first draft! Abbi Duncan (talk) 16:39, 6 April 2017 (UTC)

Abigail Gilbert Peer Review

1. All parts are present! I wonder if you created sub headings for the two essays that you detail? 2. Opening section is strong & clear. Maybe there is a better word to use other than "well known"? Also, maybe there is a better phrase than "with research in" such has "who primarily researches..." or something along those lines. 3. Clear sentence structure, strong word choice, lots of detail, clear & effective structure. No glaring spelling or grammar mistakes. 4. Overall, I think this is a very strong article. I especially enjoyed your detailing of two of her publications and citing specific examples of those articles. Strong word choice and great understanding of her research and focus of study. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Abigail.gilbert (talk • contribs) 04:40, 7 April 2017 (UTC)

Good comment, Abbi — Preceding unsigned comment added by Aburnett412 (talk • contribs) 23:32, 25 April 2017 (UTC)

Abby G -- good comments — Preceding unsigned comment added by Aburnett412 (talk • contribs) 23:36, 25 April 2017 (UTC)