User talk:Aditi Ghatlia/article

Hello Aditi Ghatlia,

I have made a couple of edits within your article page. These edits can be identified by the italicized text. There were a few grammatical errors and I also included areas that you could clarify your ideas. Overall, the article was clear. There were certain parts, specifically when describing apparatuses, that were a little wordy, and therefore, hard to follow. I advise including more images to allow for the readers to have a reference point when reading your own descriptions.

I also indicated areas in which citations would likely be helpful to verify your statements, specifically opening or introductory sentences. Additionally, I commented a couple of points in which your language suggested sweeping statements without any citation. I suggest either adding citations or developing a tone that is less "this is it" and more "one possibility is". It allows for readers and editors alike to contribute where there may be information gaps.

Rubyfreeman (talk) 14:15, 23 February 2018 (UTC)

response to peer review
Thanks so much Ruby! I appreciate your responses and have definitely integrated them into my article! Aditi Ghatlia (talk) 01:38, 26 February 2018 (UTC)