User talk:AdvEvo123/sandbox

Hey Konnor, I think your outline looks great. At first I questioned having the methods as the first section after the introduction, but after reading through the other sections, I think it makes sense to put it there. You have a good amount of content to use too. I wonder if you can include links to your instructional videos that you shared in class to enhance the learning experience. Good luck finishing the article! Jenny

Looks good :) I liked the convergent evolution section, it would be a good place for citations and links for people interested in each clade. The section after it was also really approachable even though it was long because of the way you broke it down into little bite-sized bolded sections. For the intro I would really work on making it perfect with good bolding of important words to improve readability. The intro is the first thing everyone will see and probably the only thing many people will read. Moosebro (talk) 16:22, 19 March 2018 (UTC)

Hey Konnor, I enjoyed reading your article. It seems well thought out and thorough. The intro gets a little long and dense, is there any way to break that up into multiple sections? Also, I would introduce the idea of selection pressure before talking on the four main selection pressures for cognition. I think you do a great job of explaining those four, but other readers may need a little background on what is a selection pressure. Beeology (talk) 05:59, 20 March 2018 (UTC)