User talk:Aelindqu/sandbox

Ian's Peer Review: 1. The information given is concise and is written in a fairly sequential order. It was easy to read and digest. I liked how all of her honor societies are listed with links on the words if someone was interested to learn more about the honor societies that Johnnie Ruth Clarke was a member of. 2. All the changes that you are wanting to make sound great. I think you have great ideas on how to spruce up the article like getting more information on Clarke's early life and adding additional information to sections that were already written for this wiki article. 3. The most important thing for you to do would be to find more sources. It won't be easy but the more information you have, the more background and validation you can add to the points you are trying to make. 4. I am writing an article for Mercy Hospital so this article goes can be referenced under our Johnnie Ruth Clarke section when it went under reconstruction in the 1960s. I think that some of the sources you use for your article could be applied to mine as well. Great first draft!

Peer Review Assignment: Rose Keating

I like how the article starts off with where Johnnie Ruth Clarke was from, as well as what her parents did. This gives a good background on who is being talked about in the article. It is a good starting point that leads up into the next section of Education. This section does a good job of showing where she went to school, and what her degrees were in. The next section, furthering education, shows what she did with those degrees.I am impressed with all the different honors societies that she was in.

I am a little confused if there is an lead paragraph? It goes straight to early life for Johnnie Ruth Clarke. I would definitely work on the lead paragraph, and add that in. More information should be added to early life if there is more info on that. These would improve the readers interest in Johnnie Ruth Clarke, and make them want to learn more about her.

I would suggest just expanding on each section. The information in each section is good, it just needs to be explained a bit more. Maybe some transition sentences as well.

This article showshow a woman of color can rise against the education system, and the hardships of that time. Her accomplishments is what Equality in Florida wishes for. They do not want to make it harder just because of someones gender, race, or whom they identify as. It would be interesting what challenges she faced getting her degree. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Rosekeating (talk • contribs) 16:06, 4 November 2018 (UTC)

Peer Review: By Elisa RS

1. Most of the content is insightful and relevant. I was impressed by how many groups she was a part of, and how much content was found in relation to all that. Research seems thorough and reliable. The first paragraph about the Johnnie Ruth Clarke Health Center was very well written and all the information found was informative.

2. Changes include adding a strong leading paragraph. It would be helpful to know more background information about her, including details about her family. Additions could include links to her foundation, or any images of her and her achievements.

3. The most important thing would be to add a strong lead paragraph. Additionally, more about her early life and on her education because they were the shortest sections.

4. Didn't find anything applicable to the Florida Holocaust Museum. Signed Elisa Elisa3796 (talk) 03:42, 6 November 2018 (UTC)