User talk:Aeoliva1/sandbox

Article Evaluation
I looked at the K-POP wiki page

Is everything in the article relevant to the article topic? Is there anything that distracted you? -Everything looks relevant to me, the only thing that is distracting is that some areas seem really underdeveloped compared to others Is any information out of date? Is anything missing that could be added? -The social media section has outdated numbers that could be updated. What else could be improved? -Lengthening some of the sections to be as comprehensive as the other sections. Is the article neutral? Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position? -The article seems neutral to me. Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented? -I don't think so. Check a few citations. Do the links work? Does the source support the claims in the article? -The links work, but some of them are questionable sources in my opinion. They do support the claims in the article. Is each fact referenced with an appropriate, reliable reference? Where does the information come from? Are these neutral sources? If biased, is that bias noted? -For the most part, everything has a reference, but there were some areas that could use a clearer reference. What kinds of conversations, if any, are going on behind the scenes about how to represent this topic? -There seems to be a lot of discussion about what is actually relevant to the K-pop article How is the article rated? Is it a part of any WikiProjects? -It has a C rating, and it is part of several wikiprojsects How does the way Wikipedia discusses this topic differ from the way we've talked about it in class? -Someone made a note about how the some of the criticisms of K-pop didn't belong on the wiki page, as they didn't find it relevant, but in class, we talk about these criticisms of K-pop as very relevant.

Article Selection
The article I would like to improve on is https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/K-pop#Social_media. I know I want to discuss cultural appropriation, and expand on that section, but there are a fews ways I could go about it. I could either expand on the section and keep it in controversies, or I could expand on the section and suggest to move it to the culture section. I also am deciding between discussing all cultural appropriation in K-pop, or just black cultures being appropriated. Right now, I think I am going to suggest moving the section to the culture section, and primarily focus on black cultures being appropriated. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Aeoliva1 (talk • contribs) 17:36, 30 September 2018 (UTC)

Hkim856 (talk) 14:47, 19 October 2018 (UTC) I can see your edits, but could you save your draft in your sandbox first? As you probably learn from the editing module, all writers are advised to work on their draft in the sandbox before moving it to Wikipedia page.

Yule Kang's Peer Review
Hi, I like your topic of American influence on K-Pop, and your article seems pretty organized by three sub parts. I also take strong interest in culture appropriation part. However, I have noticed that you only used four references in total, which might be far less than enough. You probably need to supplement diversified resources in your article. In addition, I suggest you can add links of certain important phrases in that field, for example, Seo Taiji and Boys. If the viewers who get interested to the band, they can just click the link to read more about that. Overall you did a nice job and keep working!

additional thoughts
Hkim856 (talk) 21:28, 5 November 2018 (UTC) I think you might want to add a bit more to the very last paragraph where you discuss a unique aspecf of Korean hip-hop. Perhaps you could engage with our classroom discussion on Seo Taiji's "Come Back Home" or "Classroom Idea" where the musician, rather than simply following gangster rap conventions, recontextualizes the genre to express social concerns in South Korea. Or perhaps any example that you've found?

Also, there's a minor error in the first paragraph: "the development of Korean Hip-hop began in the 1990’s as a result of the end of the regime of South Korea’s last dictator, Park Chung Hee." Park was not the last dictator. I would simply change a few words (i.e. "as a result of the end of the long authoritarian rule").