User talk:Afackrell/sandbox

=Evaluations=

4/23/2019 Evaluation by Gabbym9903

 * Points: 38/40
 * Grade: 95%

Spelling/Grammar
Meets expectations I did not find any spelling or grammar mistakes and the text seems to mix well with the rest of the original page.

Language
Meets expectations I like the way you have worded the content of your addition to the post. There is a good amount of information taht flows well between the paragraphs.

Organization
Needs improvement. I would recommend adding sub-headings to the different sections of the paragraph to make it easier to follow and that way it will be easier for the readers to find the information they need.

Coding
Meets expectations The coding of the paragraph looks good, if there are more sub-headings it would be even better.

Validity
Meets expectations The paragraph seems to be valid and it flows well with the rest of the original page on Wikipedia.

Completion
Exceeds expectations You have included a lot of information and it is presented in an engaging way, making your post complete.

Relevance
Meets expectations The information included meets expectations. My only concern is whether the sources used are completely reliable as they don't seem to be entirely academic/governmental.

4/24/2019 Evaluation by Paig5
Paig5 (talk) 12:15PM, 25 April 2019
 * Points: 38/40
 * Grade: 95%

Spelling/Grammar
meets standard

Language
meets standard

Organization
meets standard

Coding
meets standard

Validity
meets standard

Completion
meets standard

Relevance
meets standard

Comments
I really liked your addition to this section. You really added valuable information. the only thing I think you could work on is getting higher quality sources. Other than that it is great! -Paige

5/7/2019 Evaluation by DrMichaelWright
DrMichaelWright (talk) 06:46, 8 May 2019 (UTC) It's a good paragraph. Much better than the paragraph it follows. You might think about incorporating the best of that old paragraph into your new one. It would also be an interesting idea for this paragraph to have a header and a main-article link to the Laterna's own article.


 * Points: 35/40
 * Grade: 87.5%

Spelling/Grammar
Nearly meets standard.
 * "...an empowering navel city..." A navel is also called a belly button. You mean 'naval'.
 * Further, 'empowering'? Empowering of whom? I think you mean 'powerful'.

Language
Meets standard.
 * "...a central figure..." suggests a person. Maybe say "...a central feature..." instead.

Organization
Meets standard.

Coding
Meets standard.

Validity
Meets standard.

Completion
Meets standard.

Relevance
Meets standard.