User talk:Afowler143/sandbox

One of the biggest suggestions I have is that you need to stay more neutral. When you discuss Wilderness Therapy, you use words like ‘great’. You explain how great nature is and how the therapy does help people, which, is a bit biased. Also, you write in a way that it is clear that you support Wilderness Therapy. I don’t disagree with how you feel about Wilderness Therapy, however, the article is supposed to be more informative than personal. I can see in the way you write that you are passionate about this topic, however, I think you need to just give information.

I have a couple of minor, small suggestions. First, I would work on how your sentences flow together. Right now, your sentences are a tiny bit choppy. Second, a lot of the sentences you wrote are a little repetitive. For example, you define Wilderness Therapy many times, in multiple sentences. Third, please define the people you are discussing in your article. Who is Powch and Russell? Finally, I would work on your categories and subcategories to make it easier to read and understand. Your article is Wilderness Therapy. The definition should be in your leader. Some subcategories could be; programs, courses, orientation, assessments, CHANGES model, Support, Criticism, International programs (America included), etc.

Hope this helped!

EricaNewton (talk) 18:15, 26 March 2019 (UTC)Erica Newton