User talk:Agates99/sandbox

If you have any information about her personal life or like where she was born and living now I think that'd be awesome to add.--E locke2018 (talk) 20:32, 8 November 2018 (UTC)

I think you should delete the line emphasizing that she has been "dedicated to her work" because I think that seems too subjective/persuasive for an encyclopedia entry--E locke2018 (talk) 19:45, 8 November 2018 (UTC)

Under education, I think you should make the sentence about postdoctoral fellow specific to her. Also in the following sentence what team is "this team?"--E locke2018 (talk) 19:48, 8 November 2018 (UTC)

In your research contributions section, the second and third sentences seem like information that would need to be cited.--E locke2018 (talk) 20:39, 8 November 2018 (UTC)

Becca's comments
Her name should be the ultimate header also, I am not sure if you used the "heading" settings because you don't have a little contents box that gets created automatically when you do that.

I would say that she is an expert in earthquakes and seismology (remove "research")

your initial blurb is a bit longer than necessary (i would move everything after the 3rd sentence to later in the bio) - also everything in the blurb should be included below in the bio (it is a summary)

i would add hyperlinks to all the universities she attended. Say who the researcher was at Scripps instead of that person being anonymous

add a section on awards - you can just list them as bullet points with proper citation info in the research contribution section - i think you should rewrite much of it and remove the X said Y about her - instead you can site X when you discuss Y - it will read better this way. Also when you do this you will see that much of this paragraph is essentially you listing her awards. you need to summarize her research and contributions a bit more (though you are off to a fantastic start)

in your info box: either include the awards or remove that section — Preceding unsigned comment added by Waterbarnes (talk • contribs) 18:17, 12 November 2018 (UTC)