User talk:Agcraw9737/sandbox

Emma's Peer Review
In the second sentence there should be an apostrophe in "daughters" for "daughters marriage" so it should correctly read "daughter's marriage". The sentence beginning "The second manuscript..." is a run-on sentence. Maybe put a period before the word "however" and then let "however" start the next sentence. Also in the second to last sentence, you typed "where" when I believe it should be "were". Other than those few small errors, from my perspective you did a great job compiling new information to contribute to the original article! Emmasmith9185 (talk) 15:28, 22 October 2018 (UTC) Emma

I made the corrections you suggested. Thank you for your help!

Marissa's Peer Review Mjwilb (talk) 15:32, 22 October 2018 (UTC) I like the information that you are adding and I assume this will be added to section on Alice Thronbton's life. I see that the article is pretty bare, will you create new sections that you will add to? user: Mjwilb I added this as a whole new section on Alice Thornton's page! In the first or second sentence, delete 'in' before which. Also, will you be adding more as Marissa suggests? Dr. Bricker — Preceding unsigned comment added by Rbricker (talk • contribs) 21:36, 21 November 2018 (UTC)

Pete Weil's Peer Review
In the first sentence of your paragraph remove the word "in" before the word which. The sentence that begins with "Alice Thornton was ridiculed for these actions..." seems a little choppy and not as smooth as some of the rest. I believe you need a comma after the word "however" in the sentence where you start it with however, but I'm not sure. Overall, I enjoyed reading your summary and additions to Alice Thornton. I liked how well you integrated a quote and cited it well. There isn't a whole lot to go on in the original Alice Thornton Wikipedia page, so with the new information you have brought up, I think it will be a great addition to the article. Well done. Pete Weil (talk) 16:28, 28 November 2018 (UTC) Pete Weil