User talk:Agmarusiak/lunar sandbox

The author is taking on a very empty Wikipedia page (Lunar seismology), and I started with reading the 'future plans section' because it seemed to be the most substantial part of the original Wikipedia article and the author's proposed edits within their sandbox. I really like how the author is tackling a section that is in direct need of improvement. In the future plans section of the original article, there is a plea by Wikipedia that states the article needs to be updated, so choosing pertinent content desired by the community is very kind of the author. The continuation of this section fits in perfectly with what already exists on the Wikipedia article. Also, finding more specific and attributable information about the future plans for lunar seismology is probably difficult, so any amount of content with bits of useful information can help.

With all that being said, I wish I had a better feeling of what actually needs to be done and what the goal of the research is just by viewing the Wikipedia page. How does all of this information advance scientific understanding on earth? Someone glancing at the Wikipedia page might just click away, for the lack of content does not really help me understand anything that is going on with this topic (this is also the case with my page and I'm not blaming you or anything). For the moonquakes section, creating some kind of simple table about the categories of moonquakes could help readers understand the significance of doing seismological work like this. I think this is what was suggested in class. In my head, I am thinking of something like this: type of moonquake, the generalized observation from seismometers etc., and then how that observation actually informs what we know about the moon. I think this would be very useful because it would help organize the structure of lunar interior section. By having this table, you can directly talk about the interior from the physical phenomenon and scientific observations as written in the table. It could act as an organizing tool to write the rest of the interior section. This table would also cut down on how much you have to write. I think it would help you say more with less, which is great because concise is probably always better on a Wikipedia article. Besides these suggestions, the authors writing style and tone seem spot on. This is a weird observation, but should we be saving citations for the end of sentences or should we hang them right after the info we want to cite?

-Anongeologist, 10/21/2018

Peer Review
The lead section could be enhanced greatly. There is little information but also understandable because of the nature of the topic. The structure is fine. Looking at the structure of the Seismology wiki page, maybe some of those topics could be implemented into the Lunar Seismo page. I like how you have added material to the moonquake section as needed. I think it would be good (coming from someone who is not studying seismology) to make a comparison of the body wave magnitudes and the stress values to Earth values. Your addition to future plans is also much needed. Maybe some more information about the interior of the moon could be added. Also, it could be beneficial for a section on HOW they are studying the lunar interior. For instance, the instuments that have been/are being used. Are they the same as the ones we use on Earth? I think the article is fairly balanced and you are not biased or outwardly taking sides in any way. You have also added 6 citations, I believe, which is good for people coming to this page ready for more in depth and reliable information. Donuts4u (talk) 19:12, 22 October 2018 (UTC)