User talk:Agunth2/sandbox

Assignment 1
Go ahead and make the suggested changes. Keep in mind that the lead doesn't need to summarize everything, just the key points. Use your best judgment - you don't want to clutter the lead with too many details. Josef Horáček (talk) 20:53, 7 February 2015 (UTC)

Assignment 2
Snorkeling is an article that could benefit from better citations. Agunth2 (talk) 01:55, 9 February 2015 (UTC)
 * No kidding! Good choice. Josef Horáček (talk) 18:19, 10 February 2015 (UTC)

I wanted to change my article to Fast food since I couldn't find as much info on snorkeling Agunth2 (talk) 06:26, 12 February 2015 (UTC)
 * Go ahead. You have good sources. Josef Horáček (talk) 21:06, 16 February 2015 (UTC)
 * Thanks for integrating the sources into the article. The formatting of the references is not right, though. Too much essential information is missing. Josef Horáček (talk) 02:29, 1 March 2015 (UTC)

Assignment 3
The article on Ella Fitzgerald has a deficient lead section that could use revising. Agunth2 (talk) 23:47, 19 February 2015 (UTC)

Structure Analysis
Ella Fitzgerald is structured decently. However, there are small portions that are imbalanced ("Verve years" is much longer than most, while "Discography and collections" and "Awards, Citations, and honors" are much shorter). A few sentences, specifically in "Verve years", could be placed in other sections. The information is placed in a well-organized order. Agunth2 (talk) 01:51, 23 February 2015 (UTC)
 * I looked at your lead draft. It's an excellent start. I wonder if you could make it even stronger by saying something more specific about her music style and achievements. The mention of scat is good. Anything else? Any particular hit songs that defined her career? Or perhaps it's worth mentioning that her career was long and prolific? On the flip side, you could focus a bit less on the later stages of her life. Finally, spell out 20th (twentieth). Josef Horáček (talk) 02:38, 1 March 2015 (UTC)
 * Great job! Josef Horáček (talk) 12:28, 10 March 2015 (UTC)