User talk:Ahavriliak/sandbox

Looks great so far!

Alex2018ALR (talk) 17:28, 11 May 2018 (UTC) Alex

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Great start! Your drafted lead is a vast improvement on what the lead was as of May 10. Your tone is encyclopedic, and I think that you do an excellent job of clearly summarizing the key holdings of the case. Your sources look good. One thing that I might consider also putting in the lead (although I assume this will also go in the Background section about the case) is a super brief summary of the facts/circumstances that led to the case. I think that a generalist, non-lawyer reader might find the legal holdings of the case a bit easier to grasp on to with a little bit of initial context.Monfredo (talk) 23:21, 14 May 2018 (UTC)

Thanks, Nina! I think I will add background under a separate section, but this was a really good point!Ahavriliak (talk) 02:12, 30 May 2018 (UTC)