User talk:Ahsoka Dillard/Lucienne Divan

Hi ,
 * For the first sentence, you want the subject's name in bold followed directly by parentheses containing birth date and, if applicable, death date). Birth place/death place doesn't belong in the first sentence generally. So you would have Lucienne Divan (September 2, 1920 – December 21, 2015) was a French astrophysicist....and go on from there
 * This person is deceased--Make sure all your verbs are past tense
 * The birth date information isn't cited. Where did you get this information?
 * Instead of having a section called "biography" (the whole article is technically a biography), it is more common to see section like "Early life and education", "Career", "Awards and honors", "Selected publications" etc
 * If you know her birth date and where she was born, that's a logical first sentence in a section "Early life and education"
 * Journals are italicized (Annals of Astrophysics) and names of articles are in quotation marks "Researches on stellar continuous spectra". Because the journal title is in a foreign language, it would actually be italicized as well: "Researches on stellar continuous spectra"
 * For the awards and honors point The asteroid (1892) Lucienne, discovered in 1971 by Paul Wild. I think you can be clearer. I'm assuming you meant that the asteroid was named after her?
 * Wikipedia style is such that section titles are in sentence case, not title case, meaning only the first word and any proper nouns in a title are capitalized. So instead of "Work and Publications", you would have "Work and publications".
 * Great use of references!

I'm not an astrophysicist either! You can try posting in the slack channel if you have specific questions about her work, but how you've written about it looks alright to me! Let me know if you have questions about any of this feedback. Elysia (Wiki Ed) (talk) 21:33, 15 May 2020 (UTC)

Hi , I didn't hear from our class about adding information. Perhaps, they will feedback in the upcoming weeks. Even though it's a short article, is it publishable as is? Many thanks, Ahsoka Dillard (talk) 02:00, 24 May 2020 (UTC)
 * , yes, I think you can go ahead and move this live! Elysia (Wiki Ed) (talk) 16:11, 26 May 2020 (UTC)