User talk:Aichelemc/Horticultural therapy

The lead to your article has some solid information that pretty well sums up the majority of what you have. I think you've done a good job with that. The structure is coming along nicely, Maybe you could add a little bit about the history of horticultural therapy and where it started from. I like that you have added some of the different types of therapy that are used for different situations. Overall I think you should keep at it trying to find more information on the subject. Having more sources from different places might go a long way with more information. The things you have now seem pretty neutral in my opinion, I think you have done a great job so far. Tmbloyed (talk) 01:51, 7 November 2019 (UTC)tmbloyed

Peer Review By Erin Ford
Hi!

I found your lead section to be very informative! I didn’t know what horticultural therapy was but you made it very clear.

I think it would be cool to add a section on the education needed and requirements to be a horticultural therapist! I found this source that could help you with that: https://study.com/articles/Horticultural_Therapist_Job_Description_Duties_and_Requirements.html This gives a good look at the salary of a horticultural therapist along with the job description! Not only would explaining what this therapy is, but also explaining it from the therapists point of view, can be insightful for any reader.

You could also add a section about the history of horticultural therapy. I found this article: https://www.ahta.org/history-of-horticultural-therapy and it goes into depth about the history.

I think your article presents a clear structure! You already touched on some information but you could go more in depth by having a section called “Causes” and a section called “Effects”. Just go into depth about what causes people to go to therapy and the outcomes of horticulture therapy. The added sections will make the article look more organized.

Overall I think your article looks great already and you don’t need to listen to a single thing I said!! Just some recommendations:) You kept a neutral tone and now have a decent list of reputable sources! Erinford44 (talk) 05:29, 7 November 2019 (UTC)

Article draft feedback
You have some robust addition work here so far! It's clear that you've put thought into organizing and presenting the information in these two added sections. The biggest notes I have as you continue researching, adding, and revising are:
 * In the "Types of treatment" section, I expect (based on that section title) to see some discussion about what a range of different treatments under the larger umbrella of "Horticultural therapy" are/look like, but instead there seems to be a close overview of the steps of one specific type of treatment. I can't quite figure out how the information in this section connects to the section heading (the objective/methods/criteria/documentation pieces I think are a big part of this confusion because this is more primary source language and layout than encyclopedia).
 * Small formatting note in the "Past experiments..." section is that the experiments shouldn't be numbered--just clearly introducing them with introductory or transitional phrasing will work well.
 * I would recommend giving this a close look for biased language (one example that jumped out to me was "Horticultural therapists view their clients intentions with an open mind"...this is a broad generalization and implies that other therapeutic practitioners don't have this same approach)
 * You might already be planning to do this, but you will want to make your references at the bottom an actual reflist, including formatting and making sure your in-text citations are linking properly to it.

I think those are my biggest notes based on this draft. Let me know if you have any questions, and I look forward to seeing your final edits! Nicoleccc (talk) 00:40, 9 November 2019 (UTC)