User talk:Aidan Vogel/Mourning Wars

HI AIDAN:

GOOD START ON THIS. AND I CAN SEE THAT YOU HAVE A SANDBOX FOR THE BIB AND ONE FOR YOUR DRAFT. WORK IN EITHER PLACE AND IT IS JUST FINE. THE SECTIONS YOU'VE COMPLETED LOOK GOOD AND YOU'VE FIGURED OUT THE WIKIPEDIA FORMATTING. THE OPENING SECTION LOOKS GREAT AND DOES THE JOB IT SHOULD. YOUR WRITING IS STRAIGHTFORWARD AND CLEAR. THINK ABOUT DETAILS AND BACKGROUND AN ENCYCLOPEDIA AUDIENCE NEEDS. IF YOU ARE PLANNING TO PUT THIS INTO THE MAIN IROQUOIS PAGE, YOU PROBABLY DON'T NEED TO EXPLAIN SOME BASICS ABOUT IROQUOIS, ALGONQUIANS, AND THE FUR TRADE, BUT IF YOU'RE DOING THIS AS A STAND ALONE PIECE, IT WILL NEED MORE BASIC INFORMATION.

THE NEXT STEP IS TO FINISH UP THE SECTIONS YOU HAVE LAID OUT HERE. YOU HAVE GOOD SOURCES, BUT THERE IS MORE AND A LOT OF IT IS ONLINE. SPEND A LITTLE TIME ON THE OU LIBRARY WEBSITE AND PLAY AROUND WITH SOME SEARCH TERMS - MOURNING WAR, BEAVER WARS, ETC. IF YOU GO THROUGH THE OU LIBRARY WEBSITE, THERE ARE ONLINE ENCYCLOPEDIA OF NATIVE HISTORY, - LOOK FOR THE CAMBRIDGE HANDBOOK OF NATIVE AMERICA, IT HAS GREAT, RELIABLE MATERIAL AND WOULD BE A GOOD RESOURCES. ONLINE DICTIONARY OF CANADIAN HISTORY IS ANOTHER GOOD PLACE TO LOOK FOR MATERIAL ABOUT ALL THIS!

REALLY GOOD START SO JUST KEEP GOING. (I'M PUTTING A CHECKLIST OF THINGS TO THINK THROUGH FOR YOUR FINAL VERSION JUST BELOW MY NAME. . . )

ANNE HYDE

LEAD: Does your lead summarize the entire article by briefly covering all important aspects of the topic? Does it work as an outline for the whole article?

First sentence: does it serve as a definition of the article topic, with the topic itself — be it a person, place, thing, idea or concept — in bold, and a brief description that puts it into context.

(Example: Anna Anderson (c. 16 December 1896 – 12 February 1984) was the best known of several impostors who claimed to be Grand Duchess Anastasia of Russia.)

BODY: Fact-based, not persuasive writing. The article is a description of the information you can find about a topic, based on good sources.

Did you write in your own words? Check that the article doesn’t contain excessive quotations, or copy any sources, even if you’ve given them credit.

Does the article let the reader decide for themselves? Avoid persuasive language? Are there any words or phrases that don't feel neutral?

Did you proofread? Basic grammar and spelling are correct? Complete sentences? Remove first-person (“I/we”) or second-person (“you”) writing.

Formal tone and simple language? No technical language or jargon? Check that you’ve explained acronyms and jargon in simple English the first time you use them.

Is your formatting consistent with the rest of Wikipedia? No bullet-pointed lists or too many headings in your article.

SOURCES: Is every claim cited to a reliable source?

Are there unsourced statements? Are there enough sources

Are the sources reliable and authoritative. Does each source have citations – footnotes, bibliography, etc.

Good sources include textbooks or academic journals. Don’t cite blog posts.

WHAT ABOUT IMAGES, MAPS, LINKS? Afh1858 (talk)