User talk:Ajvb

American Academy of Political and Social Science
Thank you for your edits to the article American Academy of Political and Social Science. Unfortunately, your edits are full of promotional words and are not in standard Wikipedia form. It appears that some of the edits incorporate full text from the copyrighted content of the AAPSS site. That is not permitted. See Copyrights I have moved your edits to the talk page, so that the information can be integrated into a properly Wikipedia article. --Bejnar 20:22, 4 April 2007 (UTC)

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Bejnar - thank you for posting your comments to the talk page; I had no idea why my changes to the AAPSS page had been removed. It is important to note that my version of the page was written by the Director of the Academy, and that it was written expressly for use on Wikipedia. I did not realize we could not use our own copyrighted material and will revise it to avoid that. Could you please, however, tell me what you found to be 'promotional words'? I don't quite undestand that. Thank you
 * Phrases/words like "foster multidisciplinary understanding", "enhance", "sought to create" do create an atmosphere of promotion. To the extent possible, articles should minimize intent and maximize fact.  I did not remove all of your and the Director's work.  If you notice, I integrated more than half of the information that was verifiable, such as the topics for some of the Annals which were moved down under publications.  The lead-in paragraphs were way too long, and did not contain verified information.  And no, the horse's mouth is not considered an appropriate source.  See Citing sources, No original research and Verifiability, as well as Reliable sources. I placed the deleted material that was not reintegrated on the article's talk page Talk:American Academy of Political and Social Science so that others could read it and mine it for material to be added to the article.  Also note, that your edits were not in proper form according to the Manual of Style. Some things are a matter of taste, of course. For example, I picked the shorter of these two sentences because it flowed better in the article: "Sparked by Professor Edmund J. James and drawing from members of the faculty of the University of Pennsylvania and others, the Academy sought to establish communication between scientific thought and practical effort." and "Sparked by Professor Edmund J. James and drawing from members of the faculty of the University of Pennsylvania, Swarthmore College, and Bryn Mawr College, the Academy sought to establish communication between scientific thought and practical effort.".   --Bejnar 00:33, 14 April 2007 (UTC)