User talk:Akrovan/Environmental Concerns of Tren Maya/Egalla9 Peer Review

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 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Akrovan/ Environmental Concerns of Tren Maya

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Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

I enjoyed this article about the Mayan train project, I think it is a relevant and important piece of information

Lead


 * I think that your lead is a great overview of the project and potential environmental concerns. It has a clear sentence describing the topic, brief descriptions of the article's major sections, and it is not overly detailed

Content


 * Overall, the content is very relevant, but I have some recommendations below
 * Add some information about the historical development of the project, for example how the Mexican government decided to pursue the project and why. Were any local groups involved in the decision?
 * Add some important dates about the development of the project, are there any updates or changes due to the various protests? Has the Mexican government shown empathy for the environmental concerns of protestors or are they proceeding with the project?
 * Include some information about how the project is or is not equitable- are certain groups and areas more prone to the environmental impacts?

Tone and Balance


 * The tone is neutral and seems to be an accurate portrayal of the environmental concerns associated with the Mayan Train project, though some might argue that it would be good to include more information about the economic incentives for the government. How economically beneficial is it for the government- is it at all beneficial to local economies? How can the government incorporate or balance their economic incentives with environmental preservation?

Sources and References


 * The sources included seem to be reliable sources, and the information included reflects the content of the sources
 * Since this is an ongoing project, there are obviously many news sources covering it. Are there any peer-reviewed articles about the issue or reasons for/ against the project? You could potentially compare this infrastructure project to others like it and include some mitigation/ examples of cooperation between the government and local people. You might even consider adding another section discussing potential solutions such as the wildlife bridges
 * Make sure to finish embedding the links for your sources

Organization


 * All of the content is well-written, easy to read, and the organization of the sections makes sense
 * There are no glaring spelling or grammatical errors
 * I am not sure you need the "finally," or "additionally" at the beginning of some paragraphs

Images and Media


 * You can include some images to enhance the topic, for example a map of the region and where the construction is taking place

Egalla9 (talk) 15:09, 20 March 2023 (UTC)