User talk:Alanahirsch

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Hello, Alanahirsch, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Elysia and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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feedback
Hi I have moved your article back to your sandbox as it is not ready for the mainspace yet. There are several critical issues that prompted me to move it rather than let it remain in the mainspace for now.
 * 1) This is not a neutral article. Your words paint a very rosy view of the subject with puffy language. I've gone through the sandbox and pointed out some of these instances. Avoid "peacocking" and "puffery" such as the following phrases: legendary, best, great, acclaimed, iconic, visionary, outstanding, leading, celebrated, award-winning, landmark, cutting-edge, innovative, extraordinary, brilliant, hit, famous, renowned, remarkable, prestigious, world-class, respected, notable, virtuoso, honorable, awesome, unique, pioneering, and so on.
 * 2) You are using some low-quality sources. Wikipedia articles need multiple sources that are independent of the subject. Luthin's LinkedIn page and her company's website are not independent of her.
 * 3) You are not citing references correctly with inline citations. Review this training for a refresher on how to do that.

If you address these issues, you can take another stab at publishing this article. Let me know if you have any questions. Elysia (Wiki Ed) (talk) 20:10, 17 December 2018 (UTC)