User talk:Alaroc5/sandbox

The Lead
Your lead has lots of problems. For one, it's factually incorrect. Frederick Douglass died in 1895 and had nothing to do with the organization you found online, which in turn has no apparent connection to the organization that's the subject of the article. Instead doing additional research, you're supposed to summarize the information that's already in the article.

This may not be the best article to work on. In order to write a lead, you'd first need to take the writing that's there and organize it into sections (someone has already created some section headings at the bottom). Then you'd write a short lead to put at the top. It wouldn't need to be more than four sentences or so.

Also keep in mind that this is an article about a business and you need to keep a neutral point of view. It shouldn't read like an advertisement.Josef Horáček (talk) 10:41, 26 February 2016 (UTC)


 * Your new lead is much better. You'll notice, though, that someone has been working on the article and already wrote a lead, so there's no need for you to post yours. That's okay, you'll still get your credit. Josef Horáček (talk) 20:11, 9 March 2016 (UTC)