User talk:AlexLambright/sandbox

Good edit, Alex. Jlbrandt (talk) 21:09, 28 February 2018 (UTC)

Wiki Draft Peer Review
Kaylac8215 (talk) 06:25, 28 March 2018 (UTC)
 * The copy edits that you have made are good. It condenses the information so it's comprehensible. As you state, there is a definite need for citations once you find the right sources.
 * Should be more information on how indie publishers have grown in popularity. Maybe a specific publication that was undergroudn and is no longer?
 * "'user-submitted' sites" - you are missing an "S" on the end of site.
 * Perhaps provide information on Steam allowing discussion of games on the community section. Idk how relevant that is, but I know that Steam is a massive platform for independent games.
 * It's a good start! Just needs some more details.

PEER REVIEW--Madeline Kline
Hi Alex!

I think that the changes you've made to this page really clarify and inform some of the sections on this page that are lacking. I think what you've done with the lead section is really great, making the definition more clear and accurate is great for the page. Another thing that I really like is how well you've copyedited both of these sections. I think that for the Independent gaming section, in particular, you do a great job at sourcing and condensing what was, originally, a lot of information.

As far as making changes goes, I think that you could think about adding more to the Independent gaming section. I think explaining exactly what it is might be helpful, and definitely citing what you already have is important. Another thing you could do is try and break up the lead section into a couple of different paragraphs. This might make it easier to read.

Overall, I think the direction you're taking this page is really great! I think I might consider making similar changes to my lead section, because the clarity that you have given and the depth to which you have explained this subject really benefits the page.

Klinem (talk) 19:13, 28 March 2018 (UTC)