User talk:Alex BM/sandbox

Peer Review
Hi Alex!

The sections that you added really improve the article. I think you did a great job at explaining the impact of Laryngectomy on an individual's quality of life. I also thought it was very informative that you added a section on smell and taste rehabilitation given that smell and taste are side effects that do not receive much attention.

I have some ideas that you can consider while drafting the article. 1) The way in which NAIM is achieved by the patient (what do they do to execute this manoeuvre?). 2) Can add the prevalence of depression and anxiety in people who have undergone a laryngectomy (if there is one in the literature). 3) I'm not sure if there is any other type of treatment to treat sense of smell and taste. If there is, I think it would be informative to add another one!

"Quality of life has been found to either be similar between people with total and partial laryngectomy, or higher in people with partial laryngectomy".I think this sentence can be reworded to make it even more clear. For example, Quality of life has been found to either be higher in individuals with partial laryngectomy or in some cases, similar to people with total laryngectomy.

Great job! JessicaVoiceDisorders (talk) 01:13, 23 October 2017 (UTC)

Hi Jessica! Thank you for your review. I really appreciate the time you took to comment. So far, NAIM seems to be the only treatment out there. I agree that it could be added to. I was trying to stay within the word limit, but after reading other articles, I see that this isn't really an issue. There weren't clear stats on depression, but I think it would be relevant to look at in future studies. As for the first sentence, I also thought it could be improved while writing it. I think your alternative is much more suitable!Alex BM (talk) 00:43, 29 October 2017 (UTC)

Peer Review by Yasbey
Hi Alex,

You did a great job talking about the quality of life of patients who undergo a laryngectomy, as well as the smell and taste rehabilitation. They are both great topics to explore, and add real-life impact to the article. There are several minor edits that might be good to consider:

1.It might be good to include a bit of information on how quality of life is measured, and what are important elements to it 2.It might be good to either elaborate on what esophageal speech and electrolaryx are, or better yet, link them to their wiki pages 3.If possible, add a little bit more information on how/why sense of smell and taste are lost during laryngectomy (it seem's a bit random) 4.If there is anymore information on NAIM, it might be good to add it for context

Great job Alex! I look forward to learning more! :) Yasbey (talk) 01:36, 28 October 2017 (UTC)

Hi Yasbey! Thank you for taking the time to thoroughly review my article. I really appreciate all your comments! I didn't think of including QOL measures before. I think this could be very valuable. Esophageal speech and electrolarynx are actually explained in the article itself which is why I didn't elaborate too much. I will definitely look into better explaining sense of taste/smell. It's mainly due to the anatomy and the explanation itself is quite awkwardly done in most articles. I will need a bit of creativity I think. As I was also telling Jessica, I didn't want to talk too much about NAIM due to the word constraint, but I agree that it may be worth going over a bit to add more relevant details. THanks again! Alex BM (talk) 00:48, 29 October 2017 (UTC)

Peer edit from reidh
Hi Alex! I think that both of the sections you wrote really add a lot to the article in terms of helping to adjust the view of the in some of the more human aspects. I agree with some of the comments above, especially the hyperlinking and clarifying the measures of QOL a bit. I think it would also be useful to expand the QOL section a bit and reduce some of the jargon to make it a bit more accessible. While it is very concise and neutral, I think that changing some of the wording and adding some of yasbey's suggestions might help. Is the NAIM available as a treatment in other countries? Is it effective? I would love to know a bit more!

Great work! Reidh084 (talk) 17:45, 28 October 2017 (UTC)

Hi! Thank you so much for taking the time to review my article and adding all your comments. I really appreciate it! I didn't elaborate too much on some of the terms because they are explained in our article itself, but I agree that QOL measures can be expanded on. There was no information on the NAIM outside of Europe from what I found. I was thinking of looking up research articles instead of reviews to complete the information, as it is relatively new and therefore has made into few reviews/meta-analyses. So far however, it does seem to be effective. Thanks again for your comments! I hope to be able to implement your ideas.Alex BM (talk) 00:54, 29 October 2017 (UTC)

Peer review - Nick
Hi,

I just have a few notes in addition to what others have said:


 * Great use of hyperlinks.
 * First sentence is a little confusing. Maybe it’s clearer to say that people with a partial laryngectomy are more likely to have a higher quality of life.
 * I think it would be good to make it clearer that NAIM is used for smell and taste rehabilitation. I read the paragraph without reading the section and I wasn’t clear what NAIM was about.

Overall I like your sections and think they convey a lot of information. Kengjalrnvjwngj (talk) 20:58, 28 October 2017 (UTC)

Hi Nick, thanks you for your comments. I really appreciate you taking the time to read my sandbox. I definitely thought the first sentence was a little awkward while typing it. I think your suggestion makes a lot of sense. I will also make sure to add smell and taste in the text to add clarification. Thanks again! Alex BM (talk) 00:58, 29 October 2017 (UTC)

Feedback from Nicole
Hi Alexandra

Good job as the first time of wiki editor. However, I am not sure if the information of NAIM should be included in this wiki article. Are there any RCT studies of NAIM? Also, it seems that NAIM is mostly used in Europe/ Netherland. I will be very cautious to include this information in the wiki article.

Nicole