User talk:Alex K. Tran/sandbox

Here is a link to my peer review: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Alex_K._Tran/Digital_health/Mervitan_Peer_Review

The edit seems to jump straight into the article, so I think it would be nice to create a lead section where you can introduce a lot of the topics that you are planning to talk about. The content was very well-thought out and planned. However, I think you should try to organize all your information into different sections with relevant headings, which would made the plethora of information that you have a lot easier to follow. Overall, the tone seemed very neutral. Cite more reasons why a Delegative Democracy may have failed and perhaps try to find more examples if possible. However, I understand it is a relatively new form of democracy. There was one line where you linked the whole sentence to a source. I am not sure if you quoted it, but try to just have the number at the end and paraphrase from sources to avoid direct quotation. Try to cite all sources at the end of the sentence to avoid having two sources back to back which can confuse readers because you have "Argentina" written twice, but cited to different sources. Have your number citation after your periods for all. Add a comma after "In 2002," as it is an introductory phrase. Otherwise, content is very well-written with few mistakes. Mervitan (talk) 00:13, 16 October 2019 (UTC)