User talk:Alexandra.Hornbach.1/sandbox

Feedback on Assignment 5
Hi Group 6 -- you have made an excellent start. From what I know of this topic, the outline looks detailed and fairly complete. It should not be difficult to write a good lead from the material you have generated. J.R. Council (talk) 04:22, 26 October 2015 (UTC)
 * I just have one concern. I do not see any contributions from Hazel. You need to let me know if a group member has contributed without it being documented. I can't give credit for an assignment without some evidence of work.

Feedback on Assignment 6
For Alexandra: This is good, but can be improved. There are grammatical errors, so proofread carefully. Reference citations are not done in correct style. Finally it's a bit too long and detailed for a lead - please shorten and simplify. Also, name of topic should be bolded in first sentence.

For Sammie: Very nice job! Just a few suggestions for improvement. The name of the topic should be exactly as it appears in the title. (You're missing the hyphen.) Also, except for proper names, only the first word in the title should be capitalized. Drop "The" and just start the first sentence, "Self-regulation theory is...." These are all minor fixes. Otherwise, this will work very well for the lead.

For Hazel: This is also a good job, but too long. Just focus on the major points. Don't use the word, "you." Keep it in the third person. Encyclopedia article should not sound too personal. You also need to learn proper reference citations.

For all: Sammie's lead will be a good starting point for Assignment 7. J.R. Council (talk) 21:08, 29 October 2015 (UTC)

Feedback on Assignment 7
Hi Group 6. This is just some quick feedback to get you going on Assignment 8. I will be getting back on Sunday with more detailed comments. 1. This article is coming along very nicely. Great job! 2. Proofread the whole article. There are a number of sentences that have minor grammatical errors. 3. Get your reference citations in proper form for Wikipedia. I have posted links to reference help on Blackboard. 4. The History & Contributors section is a bit too long and needs to be broken up into subsections with section titles. See if you can edit it down. 5. Add internal links to related articles in Wikipedia, e.g., Roy Baumeister. If you work on this, you'll have plenty to do before Sunday. J.R. Council (talk) 15:39, 14 November 2015 (UTC) Additional comments and suggestions: 1. All of the above suggestions are still in effect. I want to emphasize the importance of carefully proofreading this article. 2. The Criticisms/Challenges section needs to be completed, but you already know that. 3. Please read over the pamphlet, "Editing Wikipedia articles on Psychology", especially page 2 on "Organizing your article". Use the major headings listed for an article on a psychological concept. J.R. Council (talk) 22:35, 16 November 2015 (UTC)

Assignment 8 decision
Hi Group 6, The content in this article seems fine, but there are problems that make it unsuitable for publication to the main article space. Specifically, the references still are not formatted for Wikipedia, and group members' comments to one another need to be edited out. I'm going to forward this to Ian for his comments, but you need to correct the problems before moving any of this to the main space. J.R. Council (talk) 18:23, 23 November 2015 (UTC)

Feedback
Nice work on your draft. Just a few formatting issues - the Wikipedia manual of style goes for no links in section headers (so Albert Bandura would be linked in the body of that section, not the header) and that apart from proper nouns, only the first word of a section header should be capitalized (so "History & contributors" or "History and contributors" not "History & Contributors"). The other thing is the reference style - I would strongly recommend that you construct your references using the Cite tool. Not only is it (generally) much easier to format references, it also makes it easier for other contributors, in the future, to update the article.

As I said, these are fairly minor. Nice work! Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 20:45, 24 November 2015 (UTC)

Time to publish!
Now that the references are fixed, you've addressed all of our concerns. You've got my thumbs-up to publish! Please see the instructions on Blackboard following Assignment 9 on how move the article over to main space. Congrats! J.R. Council (talk) 20:29, 8 December 2015 (UTC)