User talk:Alexisperez31/sandbox

Following from the first review of your article, your sentences should be shorter, you should include interesting of fun facts about your article person. Also, instead of writing her name over and over you should include just their last name. I believe that your sentences include too much information for one sentence and should be broken down into more than one sentence. You should include more academic language in your sandbox. Her biography sound like your telling a story and should be more about facts about her life. I find it interesting how you have that table on the side with specific information. But you should include more information about her on her article. Look at a piece of her work and talk about it. Moreover, create a space between the bold-word headings and your paragraphs. I wish I could say more but there isn't much to say because of the lack of information that isn't finished yet. ````