User talk:Alexsosaaa/sandbox

Feedback on suggested page edits:

-words like 'stratovolcano' and 'composite' should not be capitalized

-it would enhance the page if items such as 'Stratovolcano' linked to their respective Wiki page, for instance: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Stratovolcano

-I'd probably change this sentence: "Due to their eruptions, Stratovolcanoes have several distinct variations giving some a specific feature such as calderas and amphitheaters." to: "Due to their eruptions, Stratovolcanoes have several distinct variations giving some specific features, such as calderas and amphitheaters." (also link caldera and amphitheater to their Wiki page)

-change 'fragement' to 'fragements': "...pyroclastic flows containing toxic gas and hot volcanic fragment..."

-I'd add a couple commas: "Stratovolcanoes can erupt any kind of magma type, although the lava usually cools and hardens, not letting it get very far."

Altogether, lovely work.

Psybeam (talk) 01:44, 1 May 2017 (UTC)

Review
Great work! Lots of useful information with very precise detail on the specifics of the volcano. Everything seems to be organized and stated concisely while providing adequate detail. A suggestion I'd like to make is for you guys to reword the sentence "Commonly higher.... Stratovolcanoes have gentle lower slopes which gradually become steeper the higher you get..." just seems a bit wordy to me.. Other than that great job to all three of you... Liz Casey Rebekah.. Looks great. -BK

Review
Your post has great information and is very detailed. I would just check your grammar and se if there are any words missing or if you can change words. For example, in this sentence "Stratovolcanoes, also referred to as Composite Volcanoes, are the "iconically" conical-shaped volcanoes, found most commonly along subduction zones, Stratovolcanoes are composed of steeply dipping layers of lava, hardened ash, and other material that erupted from the main vent such as tephra and pumice" I would insert the word "...volcanoes, and are most commonly found along subduction zones" and then change the comma to a period. Igneousrocksrule (talk) 02:12, 2 May 2017 (UTC)