User talk:Alextsai cmu/sandbox

Haluk Akay Draft Feedback
I think you have done a great job of structuring your article around the topics of collaboration, technology, lack of common ground, and historical examples. I think that given the nature of this topic, your omission of a classic wikipedia style "origins of X topic" is good, in favor of a lengthy definition of the communication technique. I think that you could develop a more catch opener to the article, however, which may involve using the first sentence of your definition in the opening section above the table of contents. Regarding your breakdown of the various types of common ground in technology, I was wondering how you came up with those specific subsections as I find them very educational but I feel the reader may be left with the feeling that they were somewhat picked out of the blue. In order to justify some of your subsections, I recommend you search for meta analyses on the use of technology common ground. I searched for some articles, and I think that the Journal of Vocational Behavior has some useful analyses with their research on attitudinal organizational commitment. The source is http://www.sciencedirect.com/science/article/pii/S0001879104000624. Overall I thought the article is great and you have clear cited sources for your statements you make. Great job.