User talk:Aliciberry/sandbox

I think that you have a lot of good ideas going for this article. You say you will be removing the inaccurate statement, what is the statement and what is a reliable source that discredits the statement? I like the addition of the act of being choosy, just make sure that you are not too wordy in the sentence in order to avoid confusion. Even making it two sentences may help with clarification. Also, is 'being choosy' being defined in the article at to what you mean? If another group memember is not clarifying the term or if it is not already defined, maybe consider what you mean by 'being choosy' as it can be misinterpreted and you can never overclarify anything. I like your transition into the benefits of being choosy, it goes smoothly. Overall the content looks great and your changes being made will be beneficial to the article, just do not forget to cite your sources and be as clear as possible in the defintions of terms! As a rough draft it looks good, and the direction you're taking it will help to promote the 5 good qualities of a wikipedia article, especially by taking out the inaccurate information. I think it may also be beneficial to give examples of what a phenotypic trait may be to attract a choosy female, maybe even an example most people know about, like peacocks. This can really help emphasize your point as well as may it more simplistic to a curious audience who doesnt know anything about the topic.

Thank you for your feedback! I will be sure to go back and add resources and make sure I'm not being too wordy! 205.175.106.233 (talk) 21:44, 28 November 2018 (UTC)