User talk:Allison275/Women's rights in Myanmar

The article overall seems to be in great shape. It tackles many different aspects of Women’s rights in Myanmar, which are important to be discussed. The part the author included especially brings a crucial principle to the conversation, which is women’s representation in politics. Such an addition is essential when describing women’s rights and the way this impacts both the descriptive representation and the substantive representation. Identifying women in the legislature allows for possible correlation between that and women’s rights. It is relevant that the author talked a bit about what voting is like in Myanmar, and later how that impacts female representation. Also highlighting the statistics and their increase adds tremendously to the point being made. Including a bit more about voting right history could be a nice improvement to the article. Adding when women were first allowed to vote and run for office could also be even more evidence to the article. Seeing that the author is only adding a part into a bigger Wikipedia article, I see the overall essay as somewhat complete. The author needs to add a bit more information, but other than that it is nicely complete. Luisatolda (talk) 05:13, 8 December 2021 (UTC)

I think the article is at a good starting point. I really like the sections you have written in the sandbox, but the article as a whole needs some work. The article is strong in its use of media. I really like where the images are, and that they align with the information in the article that they are related to. The lead section can definitely be improved. It seems to be a bit too broad, and not related entirely to the article as a whole. There are also some issues with grammar throughout the article that make it challenging to read and understand. Honestly, the parts that you have written in the sandbox are fine, but the existing article needs some help. Some sections also need citations desperately, particularly the section on Ethnic Minorities in Myanmar. I think the article is well-developed, and there appears to be good information on each of the sections that provides a good summary of the topic. I think this article could overall benefit from a readthrough, but is at a good starting place! Emmap2 (talk) 23:03, 8 December 2021 (UTC)

Overall, this is a strong article that gives a good overview of gender inequality in Myanmar by highlighting the political and employment disparities despite gender equity present in the educational system. This article’s strengths include formatting, layout, and level of depth. The lead section is strong but could be improved with more detail-oriented writing. The breakdown is concise and the format makes the information digestible. This article could be improved by adding an intersectional layer of analysis, specifically looking at resource availability and opportunity access across socioeconomic lines; further resource acquisition may be necessary to properly address this. I would expand a little more on ethnic women’s rights, as this is an important disparity that is important when analyzing women’s current and historic rights in Myanmar. The article is developed and on track to becoming well-developed, as grammatical and editorial revision is necessary prior to publication. Good work! Isad15 (talk) 19:13, 3 April 2023 (UTC)isad15