User talk:Alondrafigueroa6/Jesse Cooday

PEER REVIEW FROM Mercedes Gialluly

Hi I am supposed to review Alondrafigueroa6 wikipedia assignment but I have been having some trouble figuring out how to type my comments under her article. Anyways, your article is a really good start. For the most part you do a really good job at steering away from being biased and using factual evidence. I really like how you went into detail about his childhood as well as his family influences upon him. In particular, towards the end of your biography you mention that your artist's artwork served as a commentary in response to Native American myths. It seems a bit broad, you should explain some of the Native American myths your artist helped argue against. This is just something that would really strengthen your artist as an influencer. Another thing to improve would be to implement hyperlinks into your article. Hyperlinks just helps define certain terms within your article that a the common person would not know just by reading your sentence. Also the hyperlink furthermore strengthens the evidence you're using for your artist. Lastly if your artist doesn't have any awards then of course you can't add anything under it, but maybe if you do a bit more researching you can find something they were recognized for. This is a very important piece of the article missing, but if not then your article is still really strong and has very compelling evidence to support you artist. Overall really good start, and by the way all my comments are optional, just things I thought you could improve on. Nstrathman (talk) 16:10, 26 February 2020 (UTC)