User talk:Alostrom/sandbox

(Fernaz Mohamadi's) Peer Review
Hi!

You picked a great topic and all your work looks really good.

In terms of organization, I think that the 'Abortion Services and Post-abortion Care' section should go after 'Maternal Healthcare', not before it. I also think the article can be split into more sections than the overlying 'Reproductive Rights and Sexual Health' heading.

In terms of grammar and sentence structure, I found the article easy to read and I liked the shorter paragraphs. The one thing I'll say is that some sentences seem really short and prematurely cut off, such as the first few sentences in the 'Maternal Health Care' section. The first sentence of the 'Water, Sanitation and Hygiene Facilities' section is also slightly repetitive.

Your sources look good and seem to come from a lot of academic sources. Also, I've noticed that a lot of citations are out of numerical order throughout the article.

I also think you could definitely expand on the 'Convention on the Elimination of All Forms of Discrimination Against Women' and talk more about that within this article.

I didn't sense any sort of bias in the writing either, which was good. It was matter-of-fact and impartial, which is perfect.

All in all, I think you have a really good thing going here, just need to make a couple adjustments.

FernazMohamadi (talk) 19:59, 5 April 2020 (UTC)