User talk:Alxesi/sandbox

Good start, maybe add headings, citations and pictures to complete your work otherwise it might seem very sparse. I'm sure you can find many citations with interesting information and sources. Carlapicasso (talk) 16:44, 6 April 2019 (UTC)

I cannot find where the work is on here. Wikipedia is very confusing. Fields18x (talk) 02:55, 1 April 2019 (UTC)

SameCbettica65 (talk) 03:14, 1 April 2019 (UTC)

I think you did a great work of introducing your topic. However, I think you can create one more subsection and make it more descriptive. Also, you should add in citation for your work. You need to make sure that your work is credible and people can trust you. Robertpark1999 (talk) 13:41, 3 April 2019 (UTC)robertpark1999

Good start! However, throughout your page you should add footnotes, sources, and hyperlink words to help the reader. Also, you should use a synonym for "mean" because it makes your facts seem a little redundant. Miaeschlidt (talk) 16:20, 3 April 2019 (UTC)

Good start. Don't forget to cite your sources, add pictures, and link other wikipedia pages. Other than that try to expand the vocabulary a little bit to make it seem more professional-grade.Henrykuv (talk) 16:55, 3 April 2019 (UTC)

I think the introduction is well written. Good job! Don't forget to cite your sources. Also, there are some grammatical errors that need to be fixed. For instance, "Meaning that the music does not need to electronically amplified to produce a distinct sound." You forgot the word "be" in between "to" and "electronically." Awhite07 (talk) 22:28, 3 April 2019 (UTC)

This is a good start! Remember to add sources and elaborate more on the history of acoustic music. I also noticed you used the word "produced" a lot so try and use synonyms in order to reduce the repetition. Sophieb905 (talk) 01:01, 4 April 2019 (UTC)

Don't forget to add headers, citations, links, and to link the article you are editing. For the sentence "Meaning that the music does not need to electronically amplified to produce a distinct sound." I would change the start to a word instead of "meaning" or maybe combine it with the previous sentence. Also add a comma after "as of the late 20th century" Oliviaohearn (talk) 02:29, 4 April 2019 (UTC)

The sentence that reads, "Common usage of the term generally means that the music was produced with instruments that produce sound with no electric help. Meaning that the music does not need to electronically amplified to produce a distinct sound" sounds repetitive. And then just add some citations and go a little more in depth with the information you have already written. Fields18x (talk) 04:57, 4 April 2019 (UTC)

HI! This is substantive information. However, I think you should hyperlink words to other cites, you should add sources to make sure your information is credible, and maybe add infographics or other images to enhance your page. Miaeschlidt (talk) 17:35, 4 April 2019 (UTC)

Make sure to add the following Citations, link key words, and possibly add a related photo. Casey518 (talk) 00:03, 6 April 2019 (UTC)Casey O'Connor

Adding some photos, as well as sources would be helpful. Benitalukose (talk) 03:20, 6 April 2019 (UTC)Benita Lukose

This is a good start! Remember to add sources, citations, keywords, and some pictures. Maybe it would also be nice if you can add a title. Bokyung0327 (talk) 02:16, 8 April 2019 (UTC)