User talk:Amaini15/sandbox

It's smart to add a background section, as I think it will make the article as a whole much more meaningful, as it provides a much clearer picture of the topic. All of your links worked well, and were not subject to a paywall. Also, I liked that you talked about historically underrepresented groups (Middle eastern women), as it is a goal of Wikipedia's to breech this equity gap. Your tone was great, as you just presented the facts and kept any voice to a minimum. If anything, I would just say to add your citations more throughout your section, but that's super minor. Some of your sentences seem like they're bordering on run-on sentences so if you just split those up you'll be good to go. You have no spelling errors, and your writing is concise and easy to understand. Tingserg (talk) 00:04, 3 December 2020 (UTC)

The article is organized well and easy to understand. A background section is an important addition to the article because it can give people a better understanding of the topic. I like how the article helps fill one of Wikipedia's content gaps by addressing Middle Eastern women, a historically underrepresented population. The content is neutral, represents multiple viewpoints, and is organized well. The only thing I would say to improve the article is to add more citations. Great article! Giacorbett (talk) 07:01, 3 December 2020 (UTC)