User talk:Amartey15/sandbox

Malik Diaw's Peer Review
After my initial reading of the original article, I noticed a gap in how it addresses and credits the influence of informal education systems and cultural education. In that vein, I think your added section on pre-colonial African education supplements this article well, especially in your explanation of education in responsibilities and cultural values and not just hard skills. I would definitely keep this element of your section and maybe even expand on it with more examples. To address your question from when we spoke in class, I do think that your added section is clear in its objective and concise and easy to understand. If you add more material to the section, I would recommend adding sub-headings within the section to differentiate different regional or societal components of pre-colonial education.

I also remember you talking about how you wanted to add to other sections with additional citations and more information. Looking at the original article, I noticed 3 areas where you might be able to supplement the original material with information you have collected from your study of pre-colonial education.
 * The Culture section under the Education heading discusses how Eurocentric curriculums depart from previous African practices. You could add information on what these practices were and possibly even what the effects have been of their erasure from educational institutions
 * I also see room to add to the Cultural Considerations section under the Adult education tab, namely where you could include more information on the informal institutions, their role in African society, and how this translates to their role in the education system. One way you might be able to add to this is to provide more examples of how this history of education has come in conflict with Western education practices
 * The last gap in information that I noticed in the original article was where the recommendations for education reform left out the history of pre-colonial educational practices. I am not sure if this has come up in any of your research, but I think it would be interesting to learn more about how modern day policy recommendations draw from traditional African education.

The internal structure of your added section is well done and there is a clear progression from a general description of pre-colonial African society to more specific mechanisms of education and household and family relationships. I was not very clear on where you are planning on adding your section, but I think the placement of your new material in the overall structure of the article could make a substantial difference. After reading through the original article, I would recommend placing your section in one of two places—either as a sub-heading within the general Education heading, maybe even before the 1.1 Language section, or as a part of the 11 History section.

Overall, I think your section is well-written and adds significantly to the original article. I am, however, left with questions about the oral story telling and festivals that you describe at the end of your section, and their role in promoting education. I think the article could be improved by adding more information about this at the end of the section. I also think that some additions to the section could be made by giving more information about the regional differences in post-colonial education across the continent. I noticed that you have sources on education in Ghana and Southern Africa, so one possible way to do this could be to compare the two sections. I am also left wanting to know more about pre-colonial education of women and different minority groups and how this changed later after colonization. Malik diaw (talk) 22:50, 6 April 2019 (UTC)