User talk:Amb2008/sandbox

Assignment for Friday, February 6
Flower_girl

I believe that this article's lead lacks clarity and a variance in sentence structure. The lead also contains information that is never mentioned again anywhere else within the article. Amb2008 (talk) 05:22, 6 February 2015 (UTC)
 * Approved. Besides fixing some of the clarity issues, you should also leave a note on the article talk page suggesting that someone write a section about the other meaning of "flower girl": a girl who sells flowers. Josef Horáček (talk) 18:30, 7 February 2015 (UTC)
 * Another student from this course chose the same article, so make sure to use the article talk page to explain your changes and communicate with others if necessary. Josef Horáček (talk) 19:32, 7 February 2015 (UTC)

Assignment for Monday, February 9
Flower_girl

Although this is the article I edited for the previous assignment, I believe that it is in need of additional, reliable articles. I plan to add information on the other meaning of the word which is a girl who sells flowers, because it is mentioned in the lead but never again anywhere else in the article. I would also like to contribute more information to the already established headings. Amb2008 (talk) 16:39, 9 February 2015 (UTC)
 * Go ahead. Josef Horáček (talk) 19:24, 10 February 2015 (UTC)

Crêpe

I changed my article to the one above because it was easier to find sources for. Amb2008 (talk) 01:08, 12 February 2015 (UTC)
 * Good job adding those sources! Josef Horáček (talk) 18:18, 24 February 2015 (UTC)

Assignment for Friday, February 20
I chose the article Ice Age (2002 film) for this assignment. I plan to add more to the lead, mostly concerning the plot of the movie. --Amb2008 (talk) 05:55, 20 February 2015 (UTC)

Assignment for Monday, February 23
The article, Ice Age (2002 film), is lacking a strong lead. It is missing a small summary of the plot, and does not do the best job of summarizing the entire article as a whole. The article has quite a balance between the different sections. Although I personally believe that the plot sections contains a little bit too much detail, all the other sections seem to balance one another and are in the right order. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Amb2008 (talk • contribs) 23:06, 22 February 2015 (UTC)
 * Approved. Josef Horáček (talk) 18:18, 24 February 2015 (UTC)
 * I'm very sorry to let you know that another student chose this article before you did. Can you find another article to work on? I'm happy to give you an extension on the project. Sorry about the inconvenience. Josef Horáček (talk) 18:08, 1 March 2015 (UTC)
 * I see that you've already written a very strong lead. If you don't want to bother with another article, I'm happy to give you full credit for the work you did. Just don't post it to the article. Let me know what you want to do. Josef Horáček (talk) 18:11, 1 March 2015 (UTC)