User talk:Ambitious Editor/sandbox

Overall, I think that you have done a good job in making the information easily understandable so that any person who would visit the page, whatever comprehension level they were at, could learn something about the villa. I would recommend going back through the first two sentences and doing some editing. If you read these sentences out loud, they sound a little choppy and could possibly be reorganized or rewritten to make what you are trying to say more straightforward. Also there are a few grammar mistakes in the last two sentences, such as an unnecessary semicolon and an issue regarding subject-verb agreement.

In terms of your sources, you have good, academic sources, so good job finding these. I would say that if you are having issues with these sources or you feel you need more information, look at the footnotes and bibliographies of the articles for books that pertain the villa and its paintings. Books will give a more general and possibly more in depth understanding of the whole villa and the paintings that might help to get a fuller picture of the paintings and the villa itself. In terms of the research you have used in your draft, I would say it's a good start. While it is good to elaborate on what was originally in the Wikipedia article, I'm wondering if there is any new information or topics you have found in your research not already in the original Wikipedia article that you could add. Also, you've only used one source so far. While it is the fundamental book regarding the villa and its paintings, see if you can incorporate information from the other six sources you have listed; having information from multiple sources will allow your information to seem stronger and fit with Wikipedia's requirement that this be a subject well discussed in scholarship. You're on the right path though.--Belainegreen (talk) 21:03, 23 November 2019 (UTC)