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Angie! I see you changed your topic like you were talking about last week! Some suggestions I had while reading the draft are as follows: - (LEAD)when comparing how black women face incarceration at higher rates and receive health care in pourer quality, including stats may strengthen your argument - (LEAD) possibly remove "as discussed in the Reproductive Health section of this page," it reads fine without the phrase - (CASE DETAILS) define "this" in "this in hand minimized..." Maybe "lack in staffing or resources"? - (IMPACT) maybe add an example how the health care standards were changed? - (MENTAL HEALTH) you can expand on why it is important to discuss mental health as a principle to feminism - maybe switch the mental health paragraph with the reproductive health since the reproduction is specific to your case and the mental health is more broad. - (REPRODUCTIVE HEALTH) nice job connecting it to class readings! - just proofread for grammar and read flow, but so far good job!

Kajolrachelle (talk) 04:18, 1 May 2018 (UTC)RACHELLE SHANKAR