User talk:AmjackEditor/Muammar Khadir Abdelwahad

To AmjackEditor
I really enjoyed reading about Muammar Khadir Abdelwahad. I know that there isn't a lot of information on most of the journalists that we were assigned, but I feel like you did a good job with all the information you could find. There are a few things that I would change but I still think are good they could just use a few adjustments... Try not to repeat information and make the sentences "stronger" it will make it look like you have more information then you really do. Overall, I thought it was great and I enjoyed reading it.-Kortni Bultman

Comments
Follow some of the points we talked about the other day. Use Lexis-Nexis. Get reactions. Use those as clues to find your significance/notability. Use inline citations. Add to context by explaining what was going on at the time and relating it to the Iraq War. Make sure you spell Tikrit and other words properly.Crtew (talk) 21:44, 22 October 2011 (UTC)

Notability is also important: CREATE THE CONNECTION BETWEEN YOUR JOURNALIST'S DEATH WHILE REPORTING TO Iraq War insurgent attacks AND THE LIST OF Suicide bombings in Iraq since 2003. I BELIEVE YOU HAVE BEEN SEARCH TOO NARROWLY ON YOUR PERSON AND NOT BROADER ABOUT THE PHENOMENON OF SUICIDE BOMBING.

Detail. Keep the 5ws and the h in mind when you write. I think you're searching too narrowly on your person and not broadly about suicide bombings in Iraq and the impact on journalists.Crtew (talk) 16:22, 28 October 2011 (UTC)