User talk:Amparo.909/sandbox

--Jounjian (talk) 03:57, 17 November 2020 (UTC)
 * I think you should add the causes section to elaborate more about the main cause of this disease.
 * The signs and symptoms section needs a brief and concise paragraph.
 * The diagnosis section needs citation.
 * In the treatments section, explain what the risk factors that are associated with each treatment that you mentioned.
 * More citations needed in the prognosis and Epidemiology sections.
 * Add a picture to make it easier for the reader to visualize the disease.
 * Overall, you have done a great job on the lay out of the wiki page. You also did a great job of organizing the information.

--Amparo.909 (talk) 05:06, 18 December 2020 (UTC)
 * All suggestions were updated and taken into account except two thing. I was unable to add a picture since no image through the WIKI website correctly corresponded to this condition. I also updated the treatment section to make it much more informative, but I did not really add the risk factors since I primarily wanted to focus on the actual treatments and preventions.

--Desarayjackson (talk) 18:50, 18 November 2020 (UTC)
 * There should be a Causes section added.
 * There should be a research section to talk about any clinical trails or research that has been done for this condition if there is any.
 * There are no sources in your diagnosis, prognosis, and signs & symptoms.
 * Not sure if your missing your abstract or if your background section is that part. So this can be cleared up.
 * Overall I think that your page is pretty well laid out and also informative.

--Amparo.909 (talk) 05:06, 18 December 2020 (UTC)
 * All suggestions were updated and corrected. Since there was no recent research I was not sure what do add, but I came across a 2019 publication in where a doctor explained his recent exposure to new effects on the patient after being exposed to this condition, so I focused on that.

--Sweiner02 (talk) 18:53, 25 November 2020 (UTC)
 * Background isn't a section. This should just be your abstract, or lead, with no header.
 * All sections need thorough and detailed citations.
 * The first time that you use any term that is either uncommon or important, it should be linked to its own wikipedia article. Linking other terms as well is also good.
 * There are some clarity and grammar issues. I would encourage you to read this over with another person (possibly the writing center) to catch them.
 * Treatment reads more like it's written for a physician than a general audience. Don't give advice, give information about what is done.
 * What you have under pathophysiology is much more like a causes section. You should have a separate pathophys section that talks about the ulcers and the issues related to them.
 * While there isn't any recent research on Christmas Eye, specifically, there is research on Pederin related eye injuries and beetles. You should have a recent research section and address this.

--Amparo.909 (talk) 05:06, 18 December 2020 (UTC)
 * All suggestions were updated and corrected. As I mentioned to my peer, I could still not find any recent research so I was going to touch on Pederin related eye injury as suggested, but I came across a 2019 publication in where a doctor explained his recent exposure to new effects on the patient after being exposed to this condition, so I focused on that instead to keep the page consistent on Christmas eye information only.