User talk:Amyers311/sandbox

Avery, The title is already there so no need to change it. The first sentence as well as the summary needs no change because it is well written by previous authors. The information that you did add is clear and easy to understand if you didn’t know who Nick Goepper was. The facts that you added are nonbiased and only informational. There is no grammar errors that I see while reading this. The formatting is already done for you which is nice. You could try to add another picture to give the article more information on Nick. There is only a picture of his home town slope course, so maybe you could add a picture of Nick Goepper himself so that readers know what he looks like. You added a reliable source to every facts you added. You could probably link between Wikipedia articles on topics like Winter Olympics, New York, or what slopestyle is? Overall, you added useful information that gave people more of an idea of who Nick Goepper is and what he does. Kmechley2 (talk) 17:11, 22 October 2019 (UTC)

Peer Review by Ashley Diggs
Avery, your title (Nick Goepper) is already a short and simple title. Therefore, there is no reason to change it. The first sentence is straight to the point which is good. I would link a wikipedia page to the words "freestyle skier" for people who are not as familiar with the sport. You culd also link Wikipedia pages to "2014 Winter Olympics" and "2018 Winter Olympics." The lead section is a good summary of your article and the reader knows from the start what Nick Goepper did to deserve a Wikipedia page. Furthermore, your article is written in simple English, making it easy for anyone to read, good job! The only word that could be kind of confusing to some readers is "in lieu" in the Personal Life section. Instead, I would just say "instead." I would also remove the word "swept" in the sentence, "At the 2014 Winter Olympic Games, Nick Goepper, Gus Kenworthy, and Joss Christensen swept the medal podium winning bronze, silver, and gold." Using this word could be a little biased and makes it seem like you are for Nick, instead of being completely nuetral. You may also want to take out his instagram captian, because that is something that he wrote. I would check the modules or with Dr. Andersen to see if this goes against the "independent sources rule". All of your grammar is correct, and seems that you really profread your article! Under Early Career, Philanthropy, and awards, I don't see any citations, so I would go back and make sure every statement is connected to one of your sources. Overall, good job! Ashleydiggs (talk) 15:48, 24 October 2019 (UTC)