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Hey there! I think your introductory sentence is pretty solid, and the summary you have written so far for each section flows well, and has a neutral tone. Personally feel like there should be an 'Achievements' section where you can list all the laws she's helped passed, and any awards she may have been given for her work. --Tropical mangosteen (talk) 18:19, 10 April 2018 (UTC)

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Lead Section -topic was concisely and accurately stated in one sentence -summary of all major points was provided -all info present is also present in the body - could add wiki links to other wikipedia pages ex. Mesa Verde National Park

Article Organization-flow of information makes sense, article follows a logical order

Content -all information provided makes sense, related to topic -wiki links to relevant articles should be added as stated before ex. Virginia Donaghe McClurg

Balace-the article is balanced, no one side is favored

Tone-the tone of the article is Neutral

Citations-all statements are well cited

Sources- all sources seem reliable and references are filled out

This new article gives comprehensive coverage of the topic. The body of the article is divided into relevant logical sections.

I agree that an achievements section would be a good addition. Also if pictures could be found of the National Park that would be awesome! Otherwise everything looks good

Mrt122495 (talk) 18:47, 30 March 2018 (UTC)

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 * Introductory sentence is concise, but maybe also include that she was a conservationist.
 * Missing "was" in second sentence
 * Include a picture of her if you can find one that's okay to use. Maybe one of the National Park too
 * You might want to add citations in the lead section


 * Article is clearly organized with relevant sections and headings
 * What level of schooling did she do in D.C.


 * What's Mesa Verde
 * You switch from referring to them by last name to referring to them by first name in the second sentence of the Mesa Verde Conservation section-- stick to last names
 * Subheadings may be useful in the Mesa Verde section to help organize and break up text ( i.e. for the Colorado Cliff Dwellings Association and the Hogg Bill etc.)
 * Use of the word "suddenly" when talking about Virginia changing her stance might be making the sentence too exciting to be considered a neutral tone


 * Biographically I might move the Personal Life section up, because it is so highly focused on her. Although, the Mesa Verde Conservation appears to have been her major work so up to you really


 * Sources used look good
 * The first two citations are written twice at the bottom


 * Some sentences could be more concise — Preceding unsigned comment added by Elo44 (talk • contribs) 18:54, 30 March 2018 (UTC)