User talk:Andrewworkman/sandbox

Hi Andrew, I thought that this was a very strong beginning draft for your article. You use the correct tone while writing and do not show any bias and remain neutral throughout the article. In addition, the sources that you used were reputable and scholarly, and you had a nice layout with different sections as well as a content table. There was also a clear structure to your article in that you followed his life from his early works to his later works and ultimately his death. As far as critiques are concerned, I believe that your lead section is a little too short and does not present the most vital information in it. I would suggest adding some information about his works to the lead section, at least maybe mention his most famous work. Furthermore, I'm not sure how necessary it is to have different sections for his different famous works of art, maybe combine his famous works of art into a section by themselves and then discuss them there. Perhaps most crucially, I believe that you need to add more sources to this article as you only used two, while not a problem in and of itself, I just believe this could cause your article to skew in the direction of only two people's opinions, rather than the collective literature as a whole. But again, the sources you did use were reputable. Also, I believe you should cite more statements in this article, you seem to have cited groups of sentences under one citation rather than cite each sentence individually. I thought you needed to cite each sentence in Wikipedia that was obtained from a scholarly source, but I could be wrong about this. Finally, I believe the most important thing you could do for you article is obtain more sources and find out more about his other works and describe those in more detail such as you did with the st. lucy and triptych of justice. More about his personal life would also be welcome too if you can manage to find that information somewhere. But again, i thought this was a very strong draft of your article and it actually made me realize some things that my own article could do better, such as not being afraid to split the article up into more sections to discuss the various works of art in more detail, and shortening the lead section and not divulging too much information there. Hope this review was helpful and best of luck! Bradyjj25 (talk) 17:26, 7 March 2017 (UTC)