User talk:Anelso/sandbox

Your article is looking really good so far! I mainly have a few suggestions for clarifying and expanding the sections that you have.

Intro -Starting out, you might want to break down the terms even further so a general reader could understand them. -What is language acquisition? -Give examples of feedback -Clarify active v. passive learning -Expand on LAD and PLD...how do these fit in? -Also, if you added a summary of the topics covered in your article, that would round out your lead section.

Social Factors -How do the 4 identified factors individually affect language learning? -Examples of each would be great!

Mediator -Good info -Maybe explain eye gaze more or give an example of a study to clarify how this social interaction works

Without Social Interaction -Mention the names of these rare cases (you may be able to link to another page then) -Which skills do these "rare" children lack? Expanding on this could help link this paragraph to the others in your article -The TV example is very helpful -Define durable please!

Child Directed -Good! even more would be great...I know someone else in the class is doing an article on this, so that could be a good resource

Neural Underpinnings- Maybe use a title like "Evolution of Language"??? -This is good information. It would be great if you could find even more on this! -Define and expand on Broca's area (and you could link it to the Broca's area page)

Sources -Looks like you have academic ones -Reference 6 says there is an error with your DOI -Add more sources if possible Smassaro24 (talk) 14:20, 12 April 2012 (UTC)

You have a great start!

I will second all of Suzanna's comments. I'd emphasize the lead paragraph information. There is some great information there, but this is the first thing the reader will see and might be a little confusing the way it is now. Defining terms and including the topics that you'll discuss later should help with that.

Good use of section headings. I think adding a little more to each, perhaps taking Suzanna's suggestions, will really strengthen each of them. You also did a good job of linking your sources. Make sure you fix that one that has an error.

Hhoff12 (talk) 14:37, 12 April 2012 (UTC)

I would think about including studies to supplement your social factors. Each provide interesting facts, but I think more information can be added. You provide great examples in your without social interaction section, and it would be great if your could do that through out your article. Try to add a bit more information to your neural underpinnings section. That part seems important and interesting. Overall, you do a great job of providing a variety of information. I would take a look at your organization and see if there is a better way to organize the paragraphs. It might require changing some of the titles or grouping topics that are related. Such a great start!

TaylorDrenttel (talk) 16:15, 18 April 2012 (UTC)