User talk:Angela.H.Carranza/Mary Lindsay Elmendolf

Hi Angela,

I left my comments in the peer review page. I'll summarize it here. First of all, great job with the research. You have a very comprehensive list of citations. That being said, please make sure all the in-text citations are working properly. Additionally, proofread the article as you continue, as there are grammatical mistakes which interfere with the message, specifically the use of present tense instead of past tense and vice-versa. However, the other main suggestion I want to make is that you move information around between sections. Currently, there is some information that I think would be better off in the Life and Education section, but you listed it elsewhere. This should in theory be a larger section than it currently is, while the Lead section is too detailed and doesn't explain the anthropologist's relevance to the field in a more general sense.

These are all the comments I could think of. You chose a really fascinating topic, and I look forward to seeing the finished product. Keep up the good work!

Sincerely, Marcos M.R. Verbera (talk) 07:24, 10 November 2020 (UTC)